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Introduction: A big hairy animal that can grow over 15 feet tall. The ancestors of the elephants. This is the Woolly mammoth.





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Topic sentence: Woolly mammoths lived during the ice age. That was about 2 million to 9,00 years ago these animals were big and heavy. They had long brown thick fur. And had two tusks. These tusks were used as if they were shovels it was to take the snow out of their way. These tusks were as long as 16 feet tall. They had short ears that measured around 3 feet.





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what am I suppose to write for the rest?

Is this good so far?
sounds good to me
Reply:Your intro needs A LOT of work. Rewrite it--right now it sounds more like an outline.





Your thesis needs to tell more about the general overview of a paper, not the nitty gritty details.





Just follow an outline. Best advice I can give you.
Reply:I'm not sure this can be a thesis.